After revising the new stiry baords to create stonger character interaction I re wrote the six stages of a narrative to accomidate the new changes.
The Story.
Exposition:
The universe starts to appear spilling out like water droplets. Nebulas swirls and form, clouds are created. Then a solitary point of sky swirls and spreads out becoming the moon. A close up of the moon shows a drop of luminescent liquid run down the side of the moon and form a sleeping girl, resting in the curve of the new moon. She wakes, yawns and looks about around her. She sees the new world around her forming and moves around her moon.
Inciting Incident:
Then in a distant sky the constellation of Pisces awakes and the two fish form from the stars and swim to the girl. They loop around her, integrating her and move away. She follows them, jumping on stars using them as stepping stones in a stream
Crisis:
As the trio run across the sky the camera moves up to showing the constellation of Draco. He also wakes up and it's eyes follow's the girls movements. It then moves to follow them.
Climax:
Draco flies to the girl and then overtakes her. Some of his feathers fall which the girl notices and is intrigued, she plays with them (which as she touches a small splash of gold light briefly appears). Draco watches her play from a distance and becomes increasingly curious so moves out from his hiding place out to the girl. The girl is first afraid and backs away but steps on a feather, again causing some gold light to appear. This sparks Draco's curiosity and the girl sees he is not a threat and now begins to trust him.
Resolution:
The girl steps on another on feather and watches Draco's reaction. She then picks up the feather and becomes him, offering him the feather. The two slowly move closer and the girl eventually touches his beak. On his touch the gold light appears and fills up the girl transforming her into a bright gold sprit/spirit like form. She jumps into the air now able to fly- transforming her arms at will into wings. Draco watches her as she fly about above his head. He then leaps into the air and flies with her. They fly close together and leave behind them a trail of green light, which can be seen from earth as the northmen lights.
The Story.
Exposition:
The universe starts to appear spilling out like water droplets. Nebulas swirls and form, clouds are created. Then a solitary point of sky swirls and spreads out becoming the moon. A close up of the moon shows a drop of luminescent liquid run down the side of the moon and form a sleeping girl, resting in the curve of the new moon. She wakes, yawns and looks about around her. She sees the new world around her forming and moves around her moon.
Inciting Incident:
Then in a distant sky the constellation of Pisces awakes and the two fish form from the stars and swim to the girl. They loop around her, integrating her and move away. She follows them, jumping on stars using them as stepping stones in a stream
Crisis:
As the trio run across the sky the camera moves up to showing the constellation of Draco. He also wakes up and it's eyes follow's the girls movements. It then moves to follow them.
Climax:
Draco flies to the girl and then overtakes her. Some of his feathers fall which the girl notices and is intrigued, she plays with them (which as she touches a small splash of gold light briefly appears). Draco watches her play from a distance and becomes increasingly curious so moves out from his hiding place out to the girl. The girl is first afraid and backs away but steps on a feather, again causing some gold light to appear. This sparks Draco's curiosity and the girl sees he is not a threat and now begins to trust him.
Resolution:
The girl steps on another on feather and watches Draco's reaction. She then picks up the feather and becomes him, offering him the feather. The two slowly move closer and the girl eventually touches his beak. On his touch the gold light appears and fills up the girl transforming her into a bright gold sprit/spirit like form. She jumps into the air now able to fly- transforming her arms at will into wings. Draco watches her as she fly about above his head. He then leaps into the air and flies with her. They fly close together and leave behind them a trail of green light, which can be seen from earth as the northmen lights.